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求教大神们帮我修改下toefl独立写作

there is a public discussion on the issue which time can a success be easier to achieve,today
or in the past.some people who object to it hold opinion that it's in the past taht makes success
easier to be obtained,while those who are in favor fo it advocate that today is easier for success.
from my point of view, i believe that success is more available today rather than in the past.

to begin with,i think the social condition nowadays is more convient than that in the past.and
this element has a great influence on the individual success.for example,economy is much more
better today compared with past.and people can benefit a lot from it.if someone wants to go
abroad for further study,it's more simple for him to obtain success today because he can get
great economic support,while it isn't possible in the past.in brief success is more simple to
obtain nowadays because of the condition which can hardly be attained previously.

moreover,to some extent,knowledge absorb attributes to the success a lot.people living in the
past hardly access to know the latest science theory or other things such as literature works.
they are also unlikely to try the science product.as a result,their views are extremely narrow.
however,people living nowadays have more ways to obtain these features.therefore,they have got
a much more widely knowledge.according to the recent survey conducted by a certain offical organisation,
people with wider knowledge are easier to succeed.in brief,it's easier to achieve success today
due to the wide-spread knowledge at present.

however,being a success in the past also has an important advantage-less competitions. a reput
conducted by a certain news agency came to us that the number of the needs of jibs have increased
greatly in the couple of years.and this means ,obviously,more competitions among people.but in my
view,more competitions lead you to work harder.and it is good for your characters.furthermore,
your success is more likely to obtain owing to the experience you gain from the competitions.

in conclusion ,although achieving success today will bring you more competitions,it provides you
with a more convient social condition as well as diversify ways of knowledge obtaining.so,
i believe achieving success today is easier than in the past.if you want to be successful,do the
things now!¹Fq™ ´.˜g/bbs.chuguo.cnëœt¢È=õ•â
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